The+Discovery+of+America's+Corrections

Here are my comments and my sugestions so that you can improve your work. Read my suggestions carefully and then make the changes.

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1. Christopher Columbus

 * Title: delete the second title, it already appears at the top of your page. Done
 * Table of Contents: You have to create a table of content with the headings. Although you have correctly created a table of contents its appearance is not right which makes it not useful. Talk to me about how to improve it.
 * Appearance: Dissorganized, unclear. You have change the size and the font of the letters and I told you not to do it. Change it. You have organized the page so now it is clear and useful but it still lacks of more images and videos.
 * Content: You haven't got enough content and you are not using full sentences. You need to work harder if you want to continue in the project. You have got tons of information on the internet so you need to research deeply and include the information on the pages. Your information is more interesting now but you mention a lot of people and give little or no information about them. Please use hypertext to link nouns to clarify them. Some information is repeated, check it.
 * Original Content: Use full sentences to write, use your own words, don't copy and paste. You have improve this aspect which is great.
 * Grammar: Quite good. I don't know if you are using your own words but you should. It is not bad but keep on checking grammar, tenses and spelling.
 * Other observations: You need to work much harder. I am sure you can do it. You need to divide the work among the group and look for information on the sources I have given you to complete your topic. You are running out of time, you need to work immediately.
 * 2nd correction's observations: I can see that you have worked and improved your work following my corrections. Your research is almost over but you need to improve the things I have written in red. Talk to me if you have any questions about what to do. Keep on the good work!
 * ¡Divide your work among the members of the group and work harder, this is not enough!

2. Preparations for the First Voyage

 * Title: delete the second title on the page, your topic's title appears at the top of your page. Done
 * Table of Contents: the table of contents is correctly located but the information included in it is not useful, because it refers to parts that do not have much information, and the titles are too long. You need to reorganize your work and create an appropriate table of contents. Not done.
 * Appearance: the main page does not make sense, it does not contain enough information. You have created too many pages that were not neccessary. Not done.
 * Content: the content is divided among different pages and it does not make sense. Y ou have to fill the main page with useful information. Focus on your topic "Preparation of the First Voyage" and search for information connected to who built the ships, who paid for the expedition, who the sailors were, what instruments, food, clothes, etc they took with them. Who were the captains of the ships, how did they hire the crew...
 * The page named "Columbus Voyage" which refers to the historical information is not connected with your topic "Preparations for the First Voyage". Write me a message so that I can delete it.
 * The page "Columbus' Pledges the Crown" is full with non original information. You have copied the data and so the page is not organized and does not make sense. It is important to rethink this page again.
 * The page "Shipping" should not contain information about the voyage itself but about the preparations of the voyage.
 * The page "Nourishment" is very very interesting. At last you wrote something connected to your topic, interesting and useful. The videos are also very appropriate.
 * The page "Navigational Instruments" contains useful and interesting information but you should extend and complete it.
 * Original Content: you have to use your own words, do not copy and paste. Not done
 * Grammar: review the grammar, be careful with the tenses and spelling.
 * Other observations: I know you have worked hard but you did not focus on your topic so you need to research again to find useful information connected to the "preparations of the voyage".
 * 2nd correction's observations: You have not improve your work enough. Your main page does not make sense, you have not followed my suggestions. Your pages do not contain useful or enough information. You are running out of time with the research. If you don't work hard enough you are endangering your grades of the 3rd trimester.
 * ¡Focus on your topic, do not wander around!

3. Capitulaciones de Santa Fe

 * Title: delete the second title, the title appears at the top of your page. Not done.
 * Table of Contents: you have to create a table of contents to help people find the information on your page. Create one. Not done.
 * Appearance: you need to organize the information in a clear way and include images and videos. Not done.
 * Content: You need a lot more content on the page. First you have to explain what the Capitulaciones were, who signed them, how were they organized, what was its purpose...Then you have to link or copy the text in spanish and summarize it in English so that anybody can understand what did the Capitulaciones say. Then you need to explain the objective of each article. Organize your work and divide it among the members of the group. Not done.
 * Original Content: you have used a translator so the information is not understandable. It is better to understand what you read and then use your own words in simple sentence than to use the translator and create something like that. Use your own words. Not done.
 * Grammar: Awful! The translator converted your page on a mess. Not done.
 * Other observations: You need to work harder. Divide the work among the group and research deeply about the topic. If you don't understand what you have to do, talk with me.
 * 2nd correction's observations: you have not worked neither improved your page. This endangeres your possibilities of passing the 3rd trimester. It's up to you, you decide!
 * ¡Not bad, but you need to work harder!

4. Christopher Columbus Voyages

 * Title: delete the second title, the title of your page already appears at the top. Done.
 * Table of Contents: the table of contents is correctly located but you are using capital letters which means that you are shouting. Change it. On the other hand, its different parts do not make sense as your page contains little information. Although you have changed the table of contents and it looks better now, it is still not useful because your main page does not contain useful information.
 * Appearance: the lack of information, images and videos makes your page not look interesting. Your main page has not been changed so it still looks awful. The rest of pages seem more interesting as you have included some images and videos. The images are too big, made them smaller so that the appearance of your page improves.
 * Content: You have divided the information among different pages which is appropriate but the main page should contain general information and a summary of the data your will expand on the other pages.
 * The page "First Voyage" should not repeat the title. Do not put information about the ships here, give the information you have about this topic to the group who is working on "Preparations of the voyage". Focus on the travel, which route did they follow, what adventures happened, which lands did they found, what they did when they reached land, etc. You have made some changes but there is still a lack of information. You need to research much more.
 * The page "Second Voyage" contains useful information but it is not written in your own words. Reorganize it and create a table of contents so that users can get to the information easily. Not done.
 * The page "Third Voyage" contains useful information but it is not written in your own words. Reorganize it, create different parts, use your own words and create a table of contents so that users ccan get to the information easily. Not done.
 * The page "Fouth Voyage" contains useful information but it is not written in your own words. Reorganize it, create different parts, use your own words and create a table of contents so that users ccan get to the information easily. Not done.
 * You need to complete the information, find useful and interesting details and organize the information in an attractive and easy way. You have not followed my suggestions.
 * Original Content: the work is not original, you have copied most of the information. It is important that you rewrite the pages using your own words. It is compulsory. Not done.
 * Grammar: as it is not your own word I have nothing to say.
 * Other observations: Complete the main page by summarizing the information on the others. Reorganize the information on the pages, fill it with details, create table of contens, and above all understand the information and make it yours.
 * 2nd correction's observations: you have not worked on the corrections I gave you. You haven't finish the research so you are not ready to use tools. You are running out of time and you are endangering your grades of the 3rd trimester.
 * ¡Good work but it needs lots of changes, please do it!

5. Columbus' Diary

 * Title: delete the second title, the title of your page appears at the top. Not done.
 * Table of Contents: the table of contents is correctly located and it is useful.
 * Appearance: The page does not really make sense as it only contains different parts of the diary. You should include images and videos as well. Not done.
 * Content: you have only copied part of the diary, it does not make sense. First you need to explain what the diary was, why was it written, what for, how and when. Then you can link or copy the diary but it is compulsory for you to explain the information in it. Not done.
 * Original Content: the content is not original, you haven't used your own words. Not done.
 * Grammar: it's not your own work.
 * Other observations: It is important that you do work by yourself, it is not enough to copy the data and put them on the page.
 * 2nd correction's observations: you have not followed my corrections and you have not worked at all. You are not ready to use other tools. And you will not create more materials until you finish the research. It is up to you but you are running out of time and it is possible for you to fail the trimester if your work on the wiki does not improve.
 * ¡You need to work harder, use your own words and research about the diary!

6. Columbus' Last Years

 * Title:delete the second title. Done.
 * Table of Contents: the table of content is correctly located but it is not really useful, improve it. You have improved it but you should not use questions on the table of contents, rewrite it.
 * Appearance: the page is clear and attractive as you have reduced the size of the images. Done.
 * Content: the content is not enough. It should focus on Columbus' prosecution, who and why accused him, what was he accused of, what happened on the trial, was he imprisoned, how did the proccess end, where, why and how he died... You have improved your research and now the page contains useful information but it is writen in a way that it is difficult to read it (it looks boring). Organize the information in different paragraphs and use hypertext and links to clarify it.
 * Original Content: you have to use your own words, it is compulsory. Good work.
 * Grammar: be careful with tenses, spelling and the organization of the sentence when forming questions. It is better but you should still check grammar, tenses and spelling.
 * Other observations: You have done some interesting work but it can be improve. Divide and organize the work among the members of the group and upload the information as soon as possible.
 * 2nd correction's observations: You have improved your work by following my corrections. You only have to organize the information in a clearer way, use hypertext and chose appropriate headings for the table of contents and you will be ready to use tools. Do this by the end of the week so that you can begin creating materials.
 * ¡Not bad, but I know you can do a better work!

7. The Treaty of Tordesillas

 * Title: delete the second title, it already appears at the top of your page. Done.
 * Table of Contents: it is correctly located but it is not really useful. Improve your toc so that it may be useful, interesting and clear. You have improved it and now it looks better and it is useful but there are discrepancies on the spaces between lines.
 * Appearance: maps and images are missed. Your page seems to be boring. Not enough images, maps or videos. You need to improve the appearance of your page.
 * Content: there is not enough interesting content on your page. You need to focus on the treaty, explain what it was, who signed it, what its purpose was...Then you have to link the treaty, read it and explain each part and decission on the treaty in English so that your page's visitor get a clear idea about it. The treaty is not linked and its different parts are not yet explained so you have not finished the research. You need to work harder. You also need to use hypertext to clarify the information.
 * Original Content: use your own words, it is compulsory. You are not using your own words.
 * Grammar: be careful with tenses and spelling.
 * Other observations: you can do a better work if you focus on the treaty. Create original content please.
 * 2nd correction's observations: although you have made some changes you have not yet finished the research. You need to work harder, read the treaty, link it and explain each part. Talk to me if you don't know what to do. You are running out of time and until the research has not finished you will not be able to use tools.
 * ¡Not bad but not enough, improve your work!